KAZEKAMI LV. Up!

So, finally, after a week and a half of sweat and restless nights, I finally "finished" my comic. Finished as it submitted it. I am going to keep working on it.

I was explaining to the teacher the joy of leveling up increasingly fast; whereas before I would like a specific piece for months, nowadays a week is all it takes for me to move on. This means that I  am progressing continuously, which is great. It also means that I cannot enjoy the satisfaction of a completed piece that I think is the best I could have done. Indeed, not 12 hrs after I submitted this comic, I have realized that the story is lacking - I knew beforehand tht the art was lacking, but I held on to the notion that perhaps the story would compensate; this is not the case.

Shall we start with a resume of KAZEKAMI? A soldier is given instructions to look for a "watergod" which may be hiding in the nearby village. His commander informs him that once he is found the army will move in and annihilate the village. The scene cuts to the village, where a blond haired man is talking with his landlady. The blond haired man is next seen wandering the town and the temple where he learns more about the watergods. Finally, he meets a young girl who talks his ear off with her problems while he gives her the classic (...) and then she reveals that she is the last watergod (that he is looking for.) The man returns to his room, wonders about the motivations behind the massacre of a village, if there is only one target. He sneaks into the priest's room and threatens him to reveal information.The priest then tells him about the truth behind the girl. The man realizes that she needs to stay alive and decides to run away from the town to make himself the focus and spare the defenseless village.

Now: critique. The concept sounded interesting at first, but it has been modified so many times that the original point seems to melt away. There is little or no character development. We are treated to Fuyu's train of thought as well as her brooding personality. Higen, however, remains a mistery even though he is a main character. It would be cool if he was mysterious, but in this comic he is simply all over the place. We have no idea what his reasons are, or if he even has any. His evolution from assassin to hero is never addressed regardless of how quickly it occurs. Instead he simply begins to work towards saving Fuyu.

On the whole, this comic seems... plastic. As soon as I began to rewrite parts of the script without hte script iteself, I lost the ability to consider the piece as a whole. Thankfully, before anyone reads this, i have become aware of it.

[edit: And I have realized that my body's ridiculous tiredness manifested itself in the impromptu naps that have been happening, out of my control (ex. sleeping at my work table, and making all the mistakes that I made originally)]